Sunday, September 18, 2011

A Couple of Lines that Don't Rhyme

It looks to me like your castle is built on a pile of wet sand.

I'd rather play in the sand than visit the crumbling rooms upstairs.

5 comments:

Emlyn said...

Ever heard the song wet sand by the red hot chili peppers?

*'than' rather than 'that' perhaps?

I'm happy to see you posting something Charles :)

Chasch said...

Well-spotted Emlyn. The typo as been corrected. Sorry about that.

No, I don't think I've ever heard that particular song by them... Is it very similar to these lines?

I was happy to post something, too. I've actually been working on quite a few creative things lately, they're just all not very blog-worthy, I'm afraid. Maybe I'll post a few extracts soon...

We should also definitely meet up for readings this week.

Marta said...

Yay Charles :D I very much liked this. Please post more often I miss your stuff. It makes me happy even if it's just two lines that don't rhyme

Emlyn said...

No worries.

The lyrics are not very similar to your lines, really the only similarity is the mention of wet sand.

Extracts are delightful and a get-together soon would be lovely!

Andrea said...

Charles you have such a knack for metaphors.

Please post more! Even if they are only two lines, they're brilliant!

(Also, I don't know why, but this one came across as somewhat dirty to me haha.

"They're like..bags of sand!")