Monday, October 18, 2010

untitled #3

this
primordial waterfall
sunken
ship
dry.

3 comments:

Chasch said...

so

short


.

Marta said...

I think this needs a bit more. It could be interesting, but right now it's kind of devoid of meaning in its sparseness...

Andrea said...

I see what you mean, Jordano. This poem is itself the primordial waterfall, now shrunken and dry. All the abundance and wet fertility is in the ancient past; now there is only desert. Even the physical shape of the poem swells briefly, then shrinks away.

Maybe it's a comment on how the writer's mind is a rich ocean, but the ink that flows on the page is only a thin trickle...on the page, all the emotion and philosophy dried out, pared down, leaving us only with barren skeletons, hints of life.

I hope I'm not over-interpreting this lol