Cheeks flushed from the walk's mild effort
Shoulders borne down with books
I bite into my apple
The fruit's firm flesh
Tears and cracks open
Sweet, tangy pulp fills my mouth
Crisp juices burst and
Tickle my gums
Out of breath
I inhale through my mouth
Opened wide
A generous smile
I taste Autumn air
I breathe apple
2 comments:
Great descriptive piece. I want to eat an apple now :) I like the inversion of expectation at the end, tasting Autumn air and breathing apple - it works perfectly, because it's absolutely right. (That's a bit of a vague comment haha :P sorry). Anyway the ending makes this.
YUM!
MSMC. The inversion of "taste" and "breathe" is brilliant, and the description of everything is so vivid.
"Nose clogged with cold" - haha!
Post a Comment