I crave your ears
I crave your silence
The sounds of my words
Blathering on
As if you all care
I crave your voices
I crave your reaction
Those vibrations in my direction
Validation or token of some affection
As if you all care
I crave your eyes
I crave the attention
Your gaze means I’m not for the moment
Invisible, I’m temporarily important
As if you all care
I crave your skin
I crave the connection
Your touch confirms my existence
Something more than thoughts and talk
As if you all care
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"Your gaze means I’m not for the moment
Invisible, I’m temporarily important"
I looove these two lines, the way they're enjambed. It changes the pace ever so slightly and helps break up the formulaic nature of this poem. I also love how it kind of has a double meaning, "I'm not for the moment," as in not temporary, which is then refuted by saying "temporarily important." It's a nice back and forth.
"Those vibrations in my direction
Validation or token of some affection"
Such a nice ring to it. It's one of those lines you keep repeating in your head because it sounds so nice.
Overall, though I enjoyed this piece, I feel like something is missing...The narrator is wishing for these people to care, but then doesn't offer a reason *why* we should care. I think this poem has a lot of potential to be expanded :)
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