The same thing
Over and over:
I keep seeing things
And shoot at them
Hoping that I've stopped it dead in its tracks
Or at the very least wounded the beast
So I can continue to follow it
And know where it's going,
But I keep seeing things.
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I actually quite liked this. It has that dreamlike quality of not knowing where something's going/coming from and just being completely disoriented and confused. I think it's great that you managed to accomplish that in so short a piece. The only thing, which I think maybe is where Jordano gets his feeling from about it being too open-ended, is the "But I keep seeing things." I'm not quite sure why it's "but". Hm. Maybe it's just the last line in general. Because it seems like it WAS going somewhere and you are shooting at the things, but then it seems like the fact that you're seeing things stops you from knowing where it's going? Or IS that what you meant? I don't know. I like it, just not that last line, it seems to disrupt the image.
Basically, it's all about false hopes and how I hope too much (the same thing/over and over)
I keep seeing things (that are probably not there and I hope to understand them or analyse them (shooting them dead in tracks) or at the very least gotten a little more information about the situation for some clarity (wounded the beast) so it "leaves a trail behind" and "I can continue to follow it/and know were it's going"
BUT
it's all in my head
Because I "keep seeing things"
This really creeped me out. I saw the title and the first thing I thought of was, "This guy is a RAPIST." Which unsurprisingly tainted my impression of the rest of the poem.
It seemed like the speaker was some kind of delusional guy who preyed on women at nighttime, but he's not really out to chase women, he's just effing deranged. Especially the part about wounding and following...all I could think of were those girls who get raped and half-killed and try to escape and the guy just slowly follows them in this creepy way but they're so mutilated they can't escape and then he eventually catches up with them and kills them. But all he wants to know is "where they're going."
And once they're dead the "things he sees" reappear, causing him to roam the night once again...
WOW ANDREA! :P
I hope you read the explanation, but then again, I enjoyed your interpretation. :D
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