or in one of the endless lineups at the airport
or in the plane, waiting for another technical issue
to resolve itself.
("The problem has disappeared", announces the captain.
Am I supposed to feel relieved?)
I kept thinking: I have to write this down
I have to write about this
But I didn't.
I just wanted to get home.
So here it goes:
Thousands of people were probably thinking
the same thing as I was.
Or were they?
The bitch whom the attendant refused at the gate
So that I could get on the plane —
I felt bad, maybe for a minute,
before incredible relief kicked in.
Or that little lady with the broken English
Who inserted herself in front of me:
"I was here, I was here before. Ask the gentleman in front."
You're going to london anyway, I thought.
Heathrow is closed today and tomorrow,
Go get a hotel room.
Which is what I did in the end,
Besides, I was in the wrong line.
Humans become cattle
queuing, shuffling;
kicking their luggage around,
too lazy to pick it up,
dozing on the floor, against pillars;
everyone is a potential angered customer
and lineups are calculated in length of wait
(averaging around 2.5 hours).
Every so often they send someone
to calm people down with desperate smiles
and a fair amount of shoulder shrugging.
They hand out water bottles and chocolate bars.
(Damage control?)
I become a specialist of air travel lingo:
Misconnections, short connections,
re-bookings, flights cancelled or delayed,
luggage rushed, lost, or on-hold;
I know what it means to be stand by,
not to have a seat on that plane you see outside
until the very last second,
to be alone, yet constantly surrounded
by people with the same problem.
I know what it means to be
stranded.
2 comments:
Idk how the effect was achieved, but I really felt like it was a long, long process. It's not like the piece dragged, but I read this and felt exhausted.
Very nice.
I have a few problems with a few lines, though.
the "Or were they?" bothered me because the rhythm made me read it like a Valley Girl, and I lost your voice.
and "The bitch whom..."
You show empathy in the first minute, so why call her a bitch? You feel bad for this woman, but are happy for yourself. It seems forced and unwarranted.
And the (Damage control?) is obviously damage control. I would have liked to see a line that would be more assertive for this purpose. You go through the "desperate smiles" but you question if it's damage control. The narrator seems smart enough to KNOW that it is damage control and not have to question it in his head or parantheses.
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Mike
Thanks for the comments, Mike. The "damage control" was meant to be sarcastic, as in "i can't believe they hand out chocolate bars as damage control". I guess I should reformulate it to make that more obvious.
I quite agree with your other comments.
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