"Can we start again?" she asks, "Go back to the beginning. Before all this shit. Before we realized we hated each other. Start again. Start with 'hello'."
I like the briefness of this, the direct and to-the-pointness. Although I feel like there should be more of a link between the first part and the second, or maybe the second part just needs quotation marks too. But I like the "Start with 'hello'" part. Kind of just sums up everything so perfectly and concisely. Breaks (rapes) the heart.
ahaha Charles. I agree with Bernard though. I feel that maybe it would've been stronger if it ended with just No. Or, "Um, no." I don't know why, but that's what I keep hearing in my mind.
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Hmm.
Kind of simplistic. Kind of too-brief.
Kind of bleak.
Kind of heart-raped.
...yeah...tried this with "someone"..
does not work that way...
I like the briefness of this, the direct and to-the-pointness. Although I feel like there should be more of a link between the first part and the second, or maybe the second part just needs quotation marks too. But I like the "Start with 'hello'" part. Kind of just sums up everything so perfectly and concisely. Breaks (rapes) the heart.
ahaha Charles.
I agree with Bernard though. I feel that maybe it would've been stronger if it ended with just No.
Or, "Um, no."
I don't know why, but that's what I keep hearing in my mind.
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